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so i had to write a poem for english class so i thought you guys might like it, feel free to critique, hopefully I'll learn something

If you go to the mountains just to go,
Or leave at four, just for the alpineglow,
Even if the conditions could make a grown man cry.
Or if on the long slog up you ask, "Why?",
but still love every minute on the mountian.

If high up, above the rest,
You yourself cant catch a moment of rest.
But still you call the mountains your church,
Just thinking high up on your solemn perch,
Or of you have willingly come face to face with death,
And love your life all the more for it.
Or if somewhat warm and glue-like oatmeal sounds good,
And thousands of feet of frontpointing sound bad.
If there is always another mountain or another route,
and getting to the top is only half,

Then you, my friend, might be a mountaineer.

-CS

squishy, what do you mean by that? Example?

-CS

If you are happy with it, that's all that counts. I hope you got a decent grade.

Ya, it was a typo, i was in a rush to type it up before heading off to class, my teacehrs a climber, so hopefully she can relate to some of it! I really like it, but will probably refien it a little bit.

-CS

spent english class today working on it while my teacher was talking about something else So i will post up my amended version later tonight

-CS

Not bad. There are formalised layouts for poems, but you don't need them. What works, works.

How about for some English work moving on to some captivating writing. There are a couple of styles you can try: The hard-hitting short sentences, bang, bang in succession - catching the tough moments. Or the long sentences, which contain a series of related nouns, verbs and adjectives - this one by Junodirtrider on mbpost (Junoiceclimber sp) caught my attention. It would sound good read out in class, or on radio. Radio lets the listener create their own scene. Writing with music playing is a great way to get it rolling, though choose the right music for what you are aiming at. I can advise on that. Here's the article:

<a href=http://www.mbpost.com/trip-report/274360/running-on-empty-part-iii-testing-the-limits-of-brokenness.html>Running on Empty</a>